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The opening poem contains all the words (or variations of them) from today's Jumble.
Comments are welcomed! And couching them in Poetry is definitely NOT required.
Do not explicitly reveal any of the actual answer words until after closing time, but embedding them surreptitiously in comment sentences is encouraged.
7 comments:
FLN Misty ~ I don't know whether you saw my last posting to you for 8/22.
I answered your curiosity about my sextet verse by adding the 2nd & 3rd stanzas.
A bit controversial perhaps, but I didn't want you to think I ignored your questions.
I am pretty tired, so I'm gonna take my postponed night off tonight. But I'll check in as audience tomorrow.
~ OMK
Oops, I meant my posting for 8/23 of course.
~ OMK
"Cool Dude"
Jeffrey was handsome and spiffy
and did everything in a jiffy.
His humor was funny and corny
and his comments were never thorny.
Any conflicts he tried to halt
even if they were not his fault.
He worked hard to stay out of debt
and did never promises forget,
which caused him to have no regret.
He was kind and in no way a tyrant
which prompted his friends to chant
'Jeffrey is our favorite friend:
we will cherish him until the end.'
Ol' Man Keith, thank you for directing me back to yesterday's posting. It was great to see that Thad is pretty much an okay guy--glad to hear it. Your verse itself had a lovely construction and neat rhymes. Thanks again for giving me a chance to read it.
Sorry you won't be posting today, but have a good rest. You deserve it.
Hi Wilbur.
OMK's encouraging me to go back to yesterday's posting also gave me a chance to read your lovely message that Chet sent Lois. Hope all stays well for both of them.
Glad you saw the rest of the Thad story, Misty. I wouldn't call him an "okay guy" exactly--unless you forgive his fascination with young mothers & fenugreek.
But his tale is surely a bit odd.
As for your Jeffrey, he seems to have been born under lucky stars. His life was certainly charmed.
Oh, to live such an easy existence! And to be so celebrated by one's friends!!
I like how you concluded by switching the voice to his pals' chant. It offered a break from the steady march, that regularity, of couplets & triplets, all in your narrator voice.
That was a mild version of the kind of punch I like to reserve till the end. Either to do it by changing the formal scheme, or to change the voice, or to slip in some surprising information. The best of course is to do all three, giving a piece a real capstone.
Brava!
I think Jeffrey was also fortunate in finding you as one of his friends!
~ OMK
Many thanks for your helpful and interesting critique of my poem today, OMK.
Thanks especially for taking time from your free day to respond--very kind.
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