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The opening poem contains all the words (or variations of them) from today's Jumble.
Comments are welcomed! And couching them in Poetry is definitely NOT required.
Do not explicitly reveal any of the actual answer words until after closing time, but embedding them surreptitiously in comment sentences is encouraged.
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Maizie Steele was a steeplejack by day.
Repairing church steeples when they fell to disarray.
To a damaged slat she would lavish care,
Somehow, always, the steeple she'd repair!
Sometimes she had to tweak a row of tiles
To fit a new one in to proper rank and files.
There was a temptation to do a slap-dash job,
But she took pride in her work, and wasn't a slob.
Spires were always steep, so she took caution.
Overlook a little thing, could put her in a coffin!
A pebble in her shoe could throw her off-balance.
She aspired to inspire with her spire talents!
Continuing my experiments with meter, today's example is a blank couplet in dactylic pentameter.
The final word, Derashot, is Yiddish for "Sermons." Pronounced with an accent on the middle syllable, it ends the couplet with a trochee.
First, an explanation of the title: Something as common as a pebble underfoot can serve in a fable or, metaphorically repurposed in a church or temple sermon, as perhaps a quantity of love. Thus, a little stone, faced with various narrative platforms, ...
"It'll Leap!"
Pebbles in shoes offer symbols of spiritual pain, though if
tweaked they can lavish affection, in Temple Derashot.
~ OMK
Just couldn't come up with a poem this morning. Ironically, my main problem was the word "pebble"--so how did both of you come up with "pebble in a shoe" in your verses, Owen and Ol' Man Keith?
So nothing but silliness:
A poem I tried to tweak
but the challenge was too steep
and all my efforts were weak.
My thoughts were simply unkempt
no topic did me tempt (here I go again with a mill)
I couldn't rhyme the word pebble (okay, maybe "treble" but looked it up and it seems to either refer to triple or three-fold things or something in high music)
though I could have rhymed 'lavish' with 'ravish'
not much help to a poetic wish.
I sound like I'm going to weep,
but I think I'll go back to sleep.
`"Pebble in a shoe" is such a common figure*, Misty, I didn't think of anything else. Its first three syllables are a natural dactyl, so it fit into my plan perfectly.
You take on an extra problem in choosing to rhyme each clue word. I respect the greater level of difficulty, but it does limit your story possibilities. You finally chose one of the best ways** (IMHO) of getting out of a jam--that of making your dilemma into your topic! You gave yourself--and us!--a delightfully humorous poem. Thank you!
~ OMK
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* It fit perfectly well into Owen's great poem--a natural snag in an occupation that relies on one's footing!
**And wouldn't "Pebble" have been a great name for a pet?!
Thank you for your always kind response, OMK. I've never heard of "pebble in a shoe"--must be one of the things that my Austrian background and slightly late learning of English kept me from learning. And, oh, you-re so right:"Pebble" would be a sweet name for a pup.
P.S. Am having some real computer problems this morning, and my e-mail isn't working. Will pray that it comes back on.
So I'm going to give it a try. No big deal, and it may well be my only time.
Aurora Australis
While hiking one day up a steep little hill
I was tempted to go off the path and I tripped.
I slid on a pebble and tweaked my big toe.
But what luck, as I rested I saw up above
A lavish display of the lights in the sky.
I think that's a bit irregular, but mostly anapest.
Just realized that my son is arriving at 10AM tomorrow and will be here on Saturday. I'm afraid I won't be able to log in on the blog again until Sunday morning. Will be in touch then, hopefully.
Sandy, I don't comment much any more, but you post verse so seldom, I need to come on and tell you your effort was excellent!
Owen, 😯😉😇
Indeed it was, Sandy!
A clean quintet with a rolling anapestic rhythm. I wouldn't call it irregular, as each line keeps the tetrameter count.
Your technique is really very good, so doesn't distract from your content. What a pleasant idea--to have an accident that turns you to the heavens!
~ OMK
Misty ~ We will miss you, but--Hurray!--your son's visit is more important.
Have a wonderful time!
(Maybe we can talk Sandy into subbing for a couple of days.)
~ OMK
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