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The opening poem contains all the words (or variations of them) from today's Jumble.
Comments are welcomed! And couching them in Poetry is definitely NOT required.
Do not explicitly reveal any of the actual answer words until after closing time, but embedding them surreptitiously in comment sentences is encouraged.
To a wilderness hiker, an "outdoorista",
ReplyDeleteThe payoff comes with a scenic vista!
To be outside, in the sheltering forest,
Listen to Nature in the songbirds' chorus!
It's a wondrous feeling, Nature a-bloom,
That's quite unknown to a gruff tycoon!
In their high glass towers over a city
Their vistas are gray, and more's the pity.
A hike in the woods would temper their views,
Let them relax from the stressful news.
But if invited, they'd raise the topic
That forest are poor at making a profit.
ReplyDelete“Traipsing the Rockies”
The Egyptian tycoon had to keep his temper in check.
His doctors advised an exercise regime
to strengthen his heart, to stave off its wreck
with a cardio plan. Their advice fed into his dream
of becoming a hiker, soon clocking miles each week,
opening up new vistas in his middle years.
His once fierce anger grew pleasantly mild & meek
and his wife was seen to smile, no longer reduced to tears.
It’s not that Ahmed had become a powder puff,
but exercise graced this Coptic more than enough.
~ OMK
Lovely poem with that characteristics ending, Owen. OMK I kept waiting for the tie-in to Egyptian.
ReplyDeleteCortical are an interesting study as they go back to beginnings of Christianity and survived Islam. Arabs probably considered them a Jewish sect.
I messws up good on visit/Vista and wS missing that all important A.
So I had to cheat on riddle-solution
WC
"Good Times"
ReplyDeleteTony was a tycoon
who met a girl named June.
She was a well-trained biker
while he was more of a hiker.
He said, lets explore some new space
with vistas that our spirits will raise,
and support our happiest temper
by enjoying being a camper.
So the topic of their romance
was to give each other a chance
to enjoy what both liked best,
and then cuddle in their happy nest.
LOL, WC, glad you were "kept waiting," as I'd hoped for the suspense.
ReplyDeleteI hope in turn you found a satisfactory payoff in the concluding couplet. I am not sure if you meant "Cortical" to be a reference to the Coptics.
~ OMK
It's a smart idea from Tony, Misty, to suggest they both give up their previous modes of movement (biking, hiking) and meet each other in a new modality (a shared camper).
ReplyDeleteNot only did it represent a sacrifice for each, but assuming (as we ought) they are getting on in years, the motorized transport must ease the strain on their bodies.
Complete with beds, an RV obviates the need for round-trip planning!
Happy to see you making a return to familiar turf, with your romantic conclusion.
I enjoyed playing with the final couplet in my verse today.
When I can't find a more direct way to include the solution's words, I will sometimes resort to (a) a Spoonerism or (b) a rhyming phrase. Today, I got a kick out of transposing the letters in the word "topic" (and adding a "c") to arrive at "Coptic."
When I saw the potential for that, I went back to my first line and added "Egyptian" to define my "Tycoon." Then I returned to the couplet and changed the tycoon's name from my original ("Jeff") to "Ahmed."
Finally I made a near-rhyming phrase with "graced this Coptic..."
I doubt I would have made the Coptic connection if one of my best friends in grad school was not himself Egyptian Coptic.
It is fun re-visiting the steps taken to put finishing touches to one's verse.
~ OMK
Ol' Man Keith, how kind you are to make such nice and helpful comments about a verse, that I feared might have been a bit lame this morning. I had a 10am Zoom appoint with my Eremiti association, and so had to really rush to put a verse together before that. But I love the way you interpret verses and fill out the possible plot--in this case, by assuming they're an older couple, which makes the verse much more meaningful. So thank you, very much for this gift today.
ReplyDeleteAnd I love your explanation of how you played with the Jumble words to come up with your delightful poem--ending in that great title derived from the solution. A wonderful treat--both the verse and the explanation--thank you for that too.
Owen, your lovely Nature poem was also a neat treat this morning. I loved the way you began by rhyming "outdoorista" with "scenic vista." And also nice that you had folks raise the topic at the end.
ReplyDeleteAnd, Wilbur, we'll look forward to getting a verse from you tomorrow
OMK, poor editing on my part. Not cortical but coptic. Coptic and some of the Syrian sects never completely bought into what eventually became the Catholic Church
ReplyDeleteMisty nice poem under the gun, may the couple enjoy RVing
WC